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Re: F10 Preview release announcement



I can see the "smell" thing being a little odd.  Lets try another one on
for size.

How about swapping:

"Do you smell that? I think its almost done!"

for

"We've been cooking, and now its time for a taste test!"

I think I like that one a lot more.

- Adam

On Thu, 2008-10-30 at 21:27 -0400, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> On Thu, Oct 30, 2008 at 08:21:30PM -0400, Adam D. Ligas wrote:
> > OK - I didn't see any responses to this.  I opted to go for funny and a
> > food theme.  Funny because I like humor, and food because I'm actually
> > quite hungry at the moment :).
> > 
> > If this doesn't fit the tone of what we are looking for I have no
> > problem throwing it out.  I was really writing this more as an exercise
> > to try to write something like this.
> > 
> > That said, feel free to hack it up and make it look like someone who
> > knew what they were doing wrote it :).  I couldn't find a link to the
> > release notes in the wiki, so that would certainly need to be added.
> 
> Not bad!  Some comments inline.
> 
> > --- Fedora Preview Release Announcement Start ---
> > 
> > Do you smell that?  I think its almost done!
> 
> We might want to go easy on the "smell" imagery unless we use gentler
> words like "aroma" or "fragrance."  But those sound a little goofy
> too...
> 
> > The Fedora Project is proud to announce the availability of the Fedora
> > 10 Preview Release.  The Fedora 10 Preview Release is our last
> > pre-release offering before we let everyone taste the goods for real.
> > 
> > Doesn't it smell yummy?  We know you can't resist, and we don't want you
> > to!  We want everyone in the Fedora community to take an early sample
> > and tell us what you find.  We think the recipe is pretty good, but now
> > is the time to make it perfect.
> > 
> > And, since this is Fedora, we don't have anything to hide.  You can take
> > a peek at what is in the secret sauce by looking at our Release Notes in
> > the Fedora Project wiki.  We use 100% pure FOSS here, none of that high
> > fructose proprietary stuff.
> 
> Beautifully done! :-)
> 
> > We expect that many of you will get nothing but a tasty treat, but some
> > of you might experience something a little more bitter.  Don't fret -
> > all is not lost!  There is still time to improve the recipe before we
> > share it with the world.  Just head on over to the Fedora Bugzilla
> > (http://bugzilla.redhat.com) and let us know what offended your palate.
> > 
> > If you'd like, you can even interact with the chefs more directly.  You
> > can join the live staff in the kitchen by coming to #fedora-qa on
> > irc.freenode.net, or you can leave a message for the staff by sending an
> > email to the fedora-test-list.
> > 
> > Ready to get your free preview sample?  Go ahead and swipe one straight
> > from the oven - we don't mind.  Put on your favorite heat resistant
> > BitTorrent mitt and grab one of the following goodies.  Take as many or
> > as few as you like.
> > 
> > Thanks for tasting!
> 
> I think overall this is just fantastic, Adam -- nice job!  Anyone want
> to take an editorial swipe?
> 
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