install-guide fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml, 1.12, 1.13

[Karsten Wade (kwade)]

Author: kwade

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv13134

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml 
Log Message:
Publication edit, mainly small edits made highly visible by not filling paragraphs, broken into individual commmits.  Some notes about this review:  this is mainly content -not- XML review, although the XML looks prit-near perfect, and I tried not to tweak the XML for the XML-sake; using 'Fedora' to discuss the 'Fedora Core' OS is a little colloquial, so I tried to catch it where I could, i.e., FED -> FC ... this is akin to 'docs' v. 'documentation'; please read and comment back directly to us author/editors -or- the mailing list.


Index: fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.12
retrieving revision 1.13
diff -u -r1.12 -r1.13
--- fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml	29 May 2005 16:48:41 -0000	1.12
+++ fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml	9 Jun 2005 00:18:04 -0000	1.13
@@ -6,7 +6,8 @@
     If you are new to Linux, you may want to use the automatic
     partitioning method.  If you are a more experienced Linux user, use
     the manual partitioning method for more control over your system
-    configuration.
+    configuration, or select and modify the automatically defined
+    partitions.
   </para>
 
     <figure id="fig-partitioning-setup">
@@ -472,7 +473,7 @@
 	    <indexterm>
 	      <primary>partition</primary>
 	      <secondary>editing</secondary>
-	    </indexterm> LVM volume group, or a LVM physical volume that
+	    </indexterm> LVM volume group, or an LVM physical volume that
 	    is not yet part of a volume group.  To change the size of a
 	    LVM physical volume partition, first remove it from any
 	    volume groups.
@@ -480,7 +481,7 @@
 	  <warning>
 	    <title>Removing LVM Physical Volumes</title>
 	    <para>
-	      If you remove a LVM physical volume from a volume group,
+	      If you remove an LVM physical volume from a volume group,
 	      you will erase any logical volumes it contains.
 	    </para>
 	  </warning>
@@ -569,7 +570,7 @@
 	    <indexterm>
 	      <primary>partition</primary>
 	      <secondary>deleting</secondary>
-	    </indexterm> or LVM physical volume.  To delete a LVM
+	    </indexterm> or LVM physical volume.  To delete an LVM
 	    physical volume, first delete any volume groups of which
 	    that physical volume is a member.
 	  </para>
@@ -642,7 +643,7 @@
 	    Select this button to set up LVM <indexterm>
 	      <primary>LVM</primary>
 	    </indexterm> on your &FED; system. First create at least one
-	    partition or software RAID device as a LVM physical volume,
+	    partition or software RAID device as an LVM physical volume,
 	    using the <application>New</application> dialog.
 	  </para>
 	  <para>
@@ -656,14 +657,16 @@
 	  <para>
 	    You may not remove a physical volume from a volume group if
 	    doing so would leave insufficient space for that group's
-	    logical volumes.  Take, for example, a volume group made up
-	    of two 5 GB LVM physical volume partitions, which contains
+	    logical volumes.  For example, if a volume group is made up
+	    of two 5 GB LVM physical volume partitions, then it contains
 	    an 8 GB logical volume.  The installer would not allow you
 	    to remove either of the component physical volumes, since
 	    that would leave only 5 GB in the group for an 8 GB logical
 	    volume.  If you reduce the total size of any logical volumes
 	    appropriately, you may then remove a physical volume from
-	    the volume group.
+	    the volume group.  In the example, reducing the size of the
+	    logical volume to 4 GB would allow you to remove one of the
+	    5 GB physical volumes.
 	  </para>
 	</listitem>
       </varlistentry>