install-guide fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml,1.9,1.10

[Karsten Wade (kwade)]

Author: kwade

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv13272

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml 
Log Message:
Publication edit, mainly small edits made highly visible by not filling paragraphs, broken into individual commmits.  Some notes about this review:  this is mainly content -not- XML review, although the XML looks prit-near perfect, and I tried not to tweak the XML for the XML-sake; using 'Fedora' to discuss the 'Fedora Core' OS is a little colloquial, so I tried to catch it where I could, i.e., FED -> FC ... this is akin to 'docs' v. 'documentation'; please read and comment back directly to us author/editors -or- the mailing list.


Index: fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.9
retrieving revision 1.10
diff -u -r1.9 -r1.10
--- fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml	20 May 2005 02:16:08 -0000	1.9
+++ fedora-install-guide-intro-en.xml	9 Jun 2005 00:18:42 -0000	1.10
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 
   <para>
     &FC; is a complete desktop and server operating system created
-    entirely with Open Source software.
+    entirely with open source software.
   </para>
   
   <caution>
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@
       <indexterm>
 	<primary>FOSS (free and open source software)</primary>
       </indexterm> <firstterm>free and open source software</firstterm>
-      (FOSS) community.  The &FP; also provides &FED; Extras, additional
+      (FOSS) community.  The &FP; also provides &FEX;, additional
       software packaged for installation on a &FC; system.
     </para>
 
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@
       To install &FC; from discs, you need four installation CDs, or the
       installation DVD.  There are separate disc sets for each supported
       <firstterm>architecture</firstterm>.  Currently, &FC; supports the
-      <firstterm>i386</firstterm>, <firstterm>ppc</firstterm> and
+      <firstterm>i386</firstterm>, <firstterm>ppc</firstterm>, and
       <firstterm>x86_64</firstterm> architectures.  These architectures
       are described below:
     </para>
@@ -148,7 +148,7 @@
       <para>
 	By default, &FC; systems attempt to discover correct connection
 	settings for the attached network using <indexterm>
-	  <primary>DHCP (Dynamic Host Control Protocol)</primary>
+	  <primary>DHCP (Dynamic Host Configuration Protocol)</primary>
 	</indexterm> <firstterm>DHCP</firstterm> (Dynamic Host Control
 	Protocol). Your network may include a DHCP provider which
 	delivers settings to other systems on demand.  The DHCP provider
@@ -203,7 +203,7 @@
 	    the name of the server
 	  </para>
 	  <para>
-	    the network protocol used for installation (FTP, HTTP or
+	    the network protocol used for installation (FTP, HTTP, or
 	    NFS)
 	  </para>
 	  <para>
@@ -241,7 +241,7 @@
       <para>
 	Some corporate networks include a <firstterm>directory
 	  service</firstterm> that manages user accounts for the
-	organization.  &FC; systems can join a Kerberos, NIS, Hesiod or
+	organization.  &FC; systems can join a Kerberos, NIS, Hesiod, or
 	<trademark class="registered">Microsoft</trademark> <trademark
 	  class="registered">Windows</trademark> domain as part of the
 	installation process.  &FC; can also use LDAP directories.