fedora-docs/install-guide fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml, 1.3, 1.4

Stuart Ellis (elliss) fedora-docs-commits at redhat.com
Thu May 5 21:15:32 UTC 2005


Author: elliss

Update of /cvs/docs/fedora-docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv10951

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 
Log Message:

Amendments for compliance with style guidelines. 



Index: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/fedora-docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.3
retrieving revision 1.4
diff -u -r1.3 -r1.4
--- fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	3 May 2005 12:19:44 -0000	1.3
+++ fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	5 May 2005 21:15:30 -0000	1.4
@@ -1,12 +1,12 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-firstboot">
-  <title>The Setup Agent</title>
+  <title>On First Boot</title>
 
   <para>
-    The first time that you load a new installation of &FC; the Setup
-    Agent will run, enabling you to configure the basic elements of the
-    system.
+    The Setup Agent will run the first time that you load a new
+    installation of &FC;, enabling you to configure the basic elements
+    of the system.
   </para>
 
   <figure id="fig-fboot-welcome">
@@ -33,10 +33,8 @@
   <note>
     <title>The Setup Agent requires a graphical interface</title>
     <para>
-      The Setup Agent cannot run if you chose to install a system with
-      no graphical interface.  In this case you must manually configure
-      a user account for yourself, and if necessary, adjust the system
-      date and time.
+      If your system does not have a graphical interface you must
+      manually carry out these configuration tasks.
     </para>
   </note>
 
@@ -80,8 +78,8 @@
     <title>Date and Time</title>
 
     <para>
-      You can either set the date and time of your system, or use
-      network time servers (NTP).  If possible you should use NTP
+      You can either set the date and time of your system, or use NTP
+      (network time protocol).  If possible you should use NTP
       servers so that your system clock will automatically be kept
       accurate.
     </para>
@@ -131,9 +129,8 @@
       <para>
 	To configure your system to use network time servers you must
 	<guilabel>Enable Network Time Protocol</guilabel>.  This
-	disables thesettings on the <guilabel>Date and Time</guilabel>
-	tab and allows you to access to the other settings on this
-	display.
+	disables the settings on the <guilabel>Date and Time</guilabel>
+	tab and allows you to access to the other settings on this screen.
       </para>
 
       <figure id="fig-fboot-time-ntp">
@@ -161,17 +158,6 @@
 	becomes unavailable.
       </para>
 
-      <tip>
-	<title>You do not need to edit the list of NTP servers</title>
-	<para>
-	  The three server clusters provide a highly reliable method of
-	  setting your system clock.  You only need change the list of
-	  <guilabel>NTP Servers</guilabel> if your system does not have
-	  full access to the Internet.  In this case replace the listed
-	  servers with the time servers on your network. 
-	</para>
-      </tip>
-
       <para> To use an additional time server either select it from the
 	<guilabel>Server</guilabel> drop-down box, or type the DNS name
 	in the box, and <guilabel>Add</guilabel>.  To remove a server or
@@ -295,8 +281,8 @@
       manufacturer to view the models of monitor.  Select the correct
       model from the list and click <guibutton>OK</guibutton>.  If none
       of the listed models match your monitor, select the closest match
-      from the <guilabel>Generic CRT Display</guilabel> or
-      <guilabel>Generic LCD Display</guilabel>, as appropriate.
+      from either the <guilabel>Generic CRT Display</guilabel> list or
+      the <guilabel>Generic LCD Display</guilabel> list.
     </para>
 
     <figure id="fig-fboot-display-monitor">
@@ -367,11 +353,11 @@
     <tip>
       <title>Changing the sound card</title>
       <para>
-      If you have to reconfigure the sound card later, use the
-	<application>system-config-soundcard</application> utility.
-	From the main menu, choose <menuchoice><guimenu>System
-	    Settings</guimenu><guimenuitem>Soundcard
-	    Detection</guimenuitem></menuchoice>.
+      Use the <application>system-config-soundcard</application> utility
+	to redetect your current sound card, if it is not automatically
+	configured after a change of hardware.  From the main menu, choose
+	<menuchoice><guimenu>System
+	Settings</guimenu><guimenuitem>Soundcard Detection</guimenuitem></menuchoice>.
       </para>
     </tip>
 
@@ -404,8 +390,9 @@
       </mediaobject>
     </figure>
 
-    <para>Click <guilabel>Next</guilabel> to move on to the final
-      screen.</para>
+    <para>
+      Click <guilabel>Next</guilabel> to move on to the final screen.
+    </para>
 
     <figure id="fig-fboot-finish">
       <title>Finish Setup Screen</title>




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