install-guide fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,1.4,1.5

[Stuart Ellis (elliss)]

Author: elliss

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv5457

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 
Log Message:

Hopefully fixed passive voice.



Index: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	5 May 2005 21:15:30 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	11 May 2005 23:38:04 -0000	1.5
@@ -4,9 +4,9 @@
   <title>On First Boot</title>
 
   <para>
-    The Setup Agent will run the first time that you load a new
-    installation of &FC;, enabling you to configure the basic elements
-    of the system.
+    The first time that you load a new installation of &FC; the Setup
+    Agent is launched, enabling you to configure the basic elements of the
+    system.
   </para>
 
   <figure id="fig-fboot-welcome">
@@ -33,8 +33,8 @@
   <note>
     <title>The Setup Agent requires a graphical interface</title>
     <para>
-      If your system does not have a graphical interface you must
-      manually carry out these configuration tasks.
+      You must manually carry out these configuration tasks if the Setup
+      Agent cannot run.
     </para>
   </note>
 
@@ -78,10 +78,9 @@
     <title>Date and Time</title>
 
     <para>
-      You can either set the date and time of your system, or use NTP
-      (network time protocol).  If possible you should use NTP
-      servers so that your system clock will automatically be kept
-      accurate.
+      You can either manually set the date and time for your system, or
+      configure your system to use NTP (Network Time Protocol) servers
+      to maintain the clock.  NTP ensures that the time is always accurate.
     </para>
 
     <para>
@@ -250,9 +249,9 @@
     <title>Display</title>
 
     <para>
-      The Setup Agent will automatically attempt to identify the
-      graphics hardware and monitor for your computer.  These are used
-      to determine the <guilabel>Resolution</guilabel> and
+      The Setup Agent attempts to identify the graphics hardware and
+      monitor for your computer.  It also uses this information to
+      calculate the correct <guilabel>Resolution</guilabel> and
       <guilabel>Color Depth</guilabel> settings.
     </para>
 
@@ -275,8 +274,8 @@
 
     <para>
       To change the selected monitor, click
-      <guilabel>Configure</guilabel>.  A list of manufacturers will then
-      be displayed.  Find the manufacturer of your monitor on the list
+      <guilabel>Configure</guilabel>.  This displays a list of
+      manufacturers.  Find the manufacturer of your monitor on the list
       and click the disclosure triangle next to the name of the
       manufacturer to view the models of monitor.  Select the correct
       model from the list and click <guibutton>OK</guibutton>.  If none
@@ -306,7 +305,7 @@
       You also can select different <guilabel>Resolution</guilabel> and
       <guilabel>Color Depth</guilabel> settings by choosing them from
       the drop-down lists.  Only the settings that are valid for the
-      detected hardware will be displayed.
+      hardware are displayed.
     </para>
 
     <tip>
@@ -326,11 +325,10 @@
     <title>Sound Card</title>
 
     <para>
-      The Setup Agent will attempt to automatically identify the sound
-      card in your computer.  To confirm that the sound card is
-      configured correctly, click <guibutton>Play Test
-	Sound</guibutton>.  You should then hear a series of three
-      sounds.
+      The Setup Agent automatically identifies the sound card in your
+	computer.  To confirm that the sound card is configured
+	correctly, click <guibutton>Play Test Sound</guibutton>.  You
+	should then hear a series of three sounds.
     </para>
 
     <figure id="fig-fboot-sound">