install-guide fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,1.8,1.9

[Paul W. Frields (pfrields)]

Author: pfrields

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
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	fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 
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Index: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.8
retrieving revision 1.9
diff -u -r1.8 -r1.9
--- fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	15 May 2005 18:41:29 -0000	1.8
+++ fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	22 May 2005 14:04:31 -0000	1.9
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
   <para>
     The <application>Setup Agent</application> launches the first time
     that you start a new &FED; system.  Use <application>Setup
-      Agent</application> to configure the system for use before logging
+      Agent</application> to configure the system for use before you log
     in.
   </para>
 
@@ -125,8 +125,7 @@
     <tip>
       <title>Setting the Clock</title>
       <para>
-	To change these settings later, use the <application>Date/Time
-	  Properties</application> utility.  From the main menu, choose
+	To change these settings later, from the main menu, choose
 	<menuchoice>
 	  <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu>
 	  <guisubmenu>System Settings</guisubmenu>
@@ -162,7 +161,7 @@
     </figure>
 
     <para>
-      By default &FC; is configured to use three separate groups, or
+      By default, &FC; is configured to use three separate groups, or
       <firstterm>pools</firstterm>, of time servers.  Time server pools
       create redundancy, so if one time server is unavailable, your
       system will synchronize with another server.
@@ -233,9 +232,8 @@
       <title>Creating extra user accounts</title>
       <para>
       To add additional user accounts to your system after the
-	installation is complete, use the
-	<application>User Manager</application> utility.  From
-	the main menu, chose <menuchoice>
+	installation is complete, from the main menu, choose
+	<menuchoice>
 	  <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu>
 	  <guisubmenu>System Settings</guisubmenu>
 	  <guimenuitem>Users & Groups</guimenuitem>
@@ -246,13 +244,14 @@
     <para>
       To configure &FED; to use network services for authentication or
       user information, select <guibutton>Use Network
-	Login...</guibutton>.  Network authentication is explained in a
-      separate tutorial.
+	Login...</guibutton>.  <!-- Network authentication is explained
+      in a separate tutorial. [Remove this comment when the
+      aforementioned tutorial exists. - PWF.] -->
     </para>
 
     <para>
-      When you have configured a login, click
-      <guibutton>Next</guibutton>.
+      After you configure login services, select
+      <guibutton>Next</guibutton> to proceed.
     </para>
 
   </section>
@@ -264,7 +263,7 @@
     <para>
       The <application>Setup Agent</application> automatically attempts
       to identify the graphics card and monitor for your computer.  It
-      also uses this information to calculate the correct
+      uses this information to calculate the correct
       <guilabel>Resolution</guilabel> and <guilabel>Color
 	Depth</guilabel> settings.
     </para>
@@ -289,10 +288,10 @@
     <para>
       If you need to change the monitor, select
       <guilabel>Configure</guilabel> to display a list of manufacturers.
-      Select the manufacturer of your monitor on the list and hit
-      <keycap>+</keycap> or select the triangle next to the name to view
-      supported models.  Select the correct model from the list and
-      click <guibutton>OK</guibutton>.  If none of the listed models
+      Select the manufacturer of your monitor on the list, and hit the
+      <keycap>+</keycap> key or select the triangle next to the name to
+      view supported models.  Choose the correct model from the list and
+      select <guibutton>OK</guibutton>.  If none of the listed models
       match your monitor, select the closest match from either the
       <guilabel>Generic CRT Display</guilabel> list or the
       <guilabel>Generic LCD Display</guilabel> list.
@@ -326,9 +325,8 @@
     <tip>
       <title>Resetting the display</title>
       <para>
-      To reconfigure your system after the installation has completed,
-	use the <application>Display Settings</application>
-	utility.  From the main menu, choose <menuchoice>
+	To reconfigure your system after the installation has completed,
+	from the main menu, choose <menuchoice>
 	  <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu>
 	  <guisubmenu>System Settings</guisubmenu>
 	  <guimenuitem>Display</guimenuitem>
@@ -343,8 +341,8 @@
     <title>Sound Card</title>
 
     <para>
-      The <application>Setup Agent</application> automatically
-      identifies the sound card in your computer.  
+      The <application>Setup Agent</application> automatically attempts
+      to identify the sound card in your computer.  
     </para>
 
     <figure id="fig-fboot-sound">
@@ -372,7 +370,7 @@
     </para>
 
     <para>
-      You can manually configure a &FED; system to use unsupported sound
+      You may manually configure a &FED; system to use unsupported sound
       cards after the installation process is complete.  Manual sound
       hardware configuration, however, is beyond the scope of this
       document. 
@@ -381,10 +379,9 @@
     <tip>
       <title>Changing the Sound Card</title>
       <para>
-      Use the <application>Audio Devices</application> utility to
-	redetect your current sound card, if it is not automatically
-	configured after a change of hardware.  From the main menu,
-	choose <menuchoice>
+	&FED; will automatically attempt to detect a new sound card if
+	you add one to your system.  If you need to launch the detection
+	process manually, from the main menu, choose <menuchoice>
 	  <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu>
 	  <guisubmenu>System Settings</guisubmenu>
 	  <guimenuitem>Soundcard Detection</guimenuitem>