F10 Preview release announcement
Adam D. Ligas
adam at physco.com
Tue Nov 4 22:37:17 UTC 2008
On Tue, 2008-11-04 at 05:06 -0500, Karsten Wade wrote:
> And so it is. Adam, thanks for the great work. I edited, tweaked a bit, added URLs, pruned, and reduced to only two exclamation points. Hopefully you find that emphasized the quality of the work by removing diluting content. :)
>
> https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Cambridge_(F-10)_Preview_Release_announcement
>
> "Test pre-release? No, way, we _taste_ pre-releases."
>
> How does everyone like this "final" version? Ready to:
Looks good to me!
Only suggestion I have, reflecting something Paul pointed out earlier,
is to reduce/remove the word "smell". So in the line
> Doesn't it smell yummy? We know you can't resist, and we don't want
> you to.
Perhaps we should change it to say "Doesn't it look yummy?".
Also, with all the nice new links tossed in, the
"(http://bugzilla.redhat.com) link in the bug section might be
redundant. Removing it might make things look/flow a little better
there.
But both of these are nit picks, and I'm +1 with or without them.
- Adam
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